OP here, higher quality version:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PFoJVSCcXnc

I like it, but the biggest tip: humanize it. Make every repeating sound slightly different. The looping creepy vocal, make it change position, phase, volume, and/or timing slightly as the song progresses. The tings and tangs, make them not so robotic and digital. Overall I love the use of melody and its a gloomy intermission that keeps almost climaxing but never does. It's so torturous but that makes it good. The way it's timed wouldn't catch onto mainstream stuff as it's too difficult, again this makes it good music. The background vocal texture if used behind a trap or dubstep beat would be an instant hit. Both are targets

>>319
By both, I mean both use as-is and use as a background melody to a more "accessible" mainstream sound.

It's pretty cool. I don't know if it necessarily needs to be "humanized" but a little more variety in texture would definitely be nice. Plus it could use either some EQ tweaking or a good master because some of the highs went beyond crisp and became piercing. I went to your soundcloud too and that's really the only criticism I have there as well: those highs is too damn shrill sometimes, it wears on me.

Other than that, you have a great ear for sounds and composition. Your songs are generally well balanced. I'm not usually one for the ultra-crisp, ultra-clear digital sound, generally preferring a little more texture but I'm digging the cold feel you have going on here. Despite the generally cold production, you tracks still have a charming character.

On your demo for Krishna, you kind of hint at the textural variety that I'm craving with some of your percussion, especially the handclaps toward the latter half. Oxygen as well has a warmer, rawer feel, probably because of the field recording in the background. Loving the tribal feel on that, as well as the way it builds as different elements are introduced. I was never sure where it was going, if it was going to stay as an ambient piece or move into banging beat territory or first one then the other. Great track.

You create tracks with great depth, and a lot of variety from track to track while still maintaining a pretty unified aesthetic. Nice incorporation of elements of different genres as well, nothing is overdone or feels shoehorned in, it's all distinct, yet it all makes sense together too. Interesting melodies, nice balance of beat-oriented pieces and ambient pieces, great use of reverb (especially on Krishna).

So yeah, for Texas in a Lexus and most of your other stuff, my only criticism is take those highs down a bit, and maybe look into ways you can use compression and filter effects to get a little more variety in texture.

Fuck, just realized this thread is like a year old.

>>1889

no shame. everybody finds things at their own pace